What do you think of this resume makeover?


Crafting a resume can be one of the most challenging aspects of job hunting. While some advice is pretty standard—focus on accomplishments instead of duties and don’t include jobs that aren’t relevant to the position—other components, such as length and including photos, are still up for debate.

That being said, what are some tips that can give seekers an edge when putting together their resumes? What does the perfect resume look like?

Over on Business Insider, editor Vivian Giang had her resume revamped by a pro, focusing on 13 elements of a strong resume. Here is her resume before the makeover:

Photo credit: Vivian Giang, Shutterstock

Photo credit: Vivian Giang, Business Insider

And after:

Photo credit: Vivian Giang, Business Insider

Photo credit: Vivian Giang, Business Insider

Read the rationale behind the changes on Business Insider.

While there are changes that make sense to me (including social media links, moving education to the bottom, removal of irrelevant jobs), there are some that I wouldn’t think to make (including a professional summary and list of core competencies). Additionally, while I find the new version much easier to read, the only job that lists accomplishments is the first job—what about the others?

What do you think of this resume makeover? Share your insights below.

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  1. The second one is much clearer i didnt know she was a reporter looking at the first one. Only thing the first she says ma candidate thr second gives impression she always recieved her degree. But the second is better exp to avg reader

  2. It looks like they focused on accomplishments in her current job. The other jobs still list her activities, which don’t seem all that different in their coverage from the first resume (e.g.: “Worked with producers to translate interviews…” vs. — oops, that’ s not even on her first resume. Maybe they cut a little much out in her second resume, but I agree that it is MUCH easier to read with a better eye flow. I understand HR (if it’s a live person) scans pretty quickly. I wonder about putting a note in that says “more related experiences available upon request”.

  3. Misty-Anne Marold on

    I like the visual punch of the second resume, but would find the lack of detail off-putting. Maybe put more detailed job experiences, as shown on the first version, on the second page. That way the hiring folks don’t need to ask for more information to simply decide if the person makes the first or second cut to interview. That said, with the addition of some formatting, I find the first one generally pretty good. But, in my field, detailed resume/CVs are the norm. Nobody bothers to try and fit onto one page.

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  5. The most interesting change, to my eye, is the personality profile to start. I like the concept of starting by shining. I am concerned, however, that the opening paragraph uses all the buzz words found in the employment ads: sense of urgency; fast-paced environment; excellent oral and written skills; and handle several projects simultaneously. I would imagine that the trick is to hit on these points without appearing to parrot an ad. Can that be done just with synonyms? I’m not so sure, so I’m trying to figure out a balance.

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